This is my best story is you come by to read it then tell me what you think
Prologue: A threat is born
“Algoba, Come!” The voice echoed the room. As Algoba knelt down before Auroson, he noticed three warriors walk to the throne.
Algoba wore heavy black armor, and he wore a great helmet the same color. His boots and gloves were black leather. His helmet stood high and hid his face. It had spikes on the top, and eyes of blue light beamed out of the helmet.
“Rise!” Auroson said savagely. He stood “Fight them to prove your worth.” The last one alive shall be my right hand and the commander of my army.” Auroson sat on a throne and had thick armor so his face wasn’t visible. His voice sounded like a human’s.
“It shall be done my lord” Algoba breathed as he talked sending a shiver down your spine. “They shall quake under my sword.” Auroson nodded.
Algoba turned around with fire in his eyes. One warrior smashed his massive fist against another warrior’s armor denting it. Algoba jumped at the third warrior and gave him a flying fist. The guard flinched. They both drew their sword and rushed at each other ferociously. When they met with their swords, the whole room shook, and sparks sprang out. Again and again they met with equal power. Algoba tried to swing his sword as complicated as he could, but with no avail. Algoba tried something different this time they met. When they met again with swords, he let out a sneaky knee to the warrior’s stomach. The warrior leaned over. Before he could recover Algoba let out another knee to his face, and the warrior fell down in agony. Algoba pointed his sword to the sky and he beheaded the honorable warrior.
The other two warriors were clashing swords. Their fight was much like Algoba’s when he was fighting the other warrior.
Algoba saw this, and he started to levitate in the air and started to turn into a dark demonic color. Algoba started to chant, and then he barked, Alo mendasa. The body of the dead warrior started to float in the air and bones started to crackle. As the bones started to a form a skeleton, the two warriors stopped fighting. One of the warriors ripped a pole out of the side of Auroson’s throne, making him have two weapons, and charged at the skeleton. The skeleton grabbed the dead warrior’s sword off the ground, and rushed at the warrior.
Algoba expected this, and grabbed a dagger out of one of his pouches and chuckled as he released the dagger with his two fingers. The warrior fell with the dagger between his eyes.
The skeleton unconsciously swung his sword at the warrior, but the warrior blocked it easily. He began smashing the skeleton’s ribs into pieces. The skeleton swung again with such force that the warrior could only block part of it, and a huge gash formed on his arm. In agony, the skeleton finishes his life with a stab to the warrior’s throat. When the warrior fell Algoba went to the skeleton’s presence.
Auroson stood up, and there was a long moment of silence. Then Auroson waved his hand and the dead warriors floated in the air and a head of something formed on the ground. The skeleton was already formed, but something else was forming under it. Algoba made it out to be a horse skeleton. Auroson started to laugh maniacally. Algoba backed away from the forming skeleton as far away as he could. He was very unwilling to do the spell that would kill the skeletons, but both of his hands started to turn into a blood red color.
“Behold my Undead Knight!” Auroson roared. The knights were purely made for fighting. The skeleton had thick armor, and had a two-handed sword. The dead horse had armor everywhere except his mouth and his eyes, and it didn’t have teeth like a regular horse. It had sharp pointy teeth.
“Finish him,” shouted Auroson. The undead knight rushed at Algoba and his little skeleton. “Hold them off,” said Algoba. The skeleton nodded his head and mindlessly charged at the knights. The knights ran twice as fast as a live horse so the skeleton made it to the knights in just a few seconds. He swung his sword as hard and as ferocious as he could, but the knight just simply blocked it, and reduced it to ashes.
Algoba was now ready to launch his attack that took every ounce of his power. He pointed both of his hands at the knights, and roared, BRUSONIO! Fire burst out of his hands with such force, it knocked him down. The fire raced to the skeletons. When the fire hit them the knights put up a good struggle, but was simply no match with something so powerful. Algoba is the champion. A threat is born.

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Sweet story, I hope that you can keep it up, but could you make it more easier to read, please?

Ya I know I shpuld I guess I was a bit lazy.

Hmm for some reason I'm afraid I can't make it easier to read because it won't indint. When I go to the preview it just moves back to its original place again. Can someone help me out I just got here today so I don't know a whole lot.

Helo this is the 1st chapter and at the end I want you guys to tell me if you want me to continue. I have a whole-nother chapter after this, but first I want yu guys to tell me if I should continue.

Chapter 1: Threat or Savior?

The village of Brimeer is home to the dwarves. They haven’t seen any action for years, but they still wait until the king needs them.

In the middle of the night, the sky turned blood red, and the trees were smoking to a point that was almost unbearable. Khan knew what was happening but he dared not to say. Khan is a dwarf and the leader of Brimeer. He is the strongest of all the village’s dwarfs. He is fat, but could hurl a thousand pound boulder at an enemy.

Khan grabbed every weapon he could find and his armor, which was chain mail. He put on his chain boots, and a helmet that rubbed against his brittle black mustache and his pitch-black long hair. He then grabbed his war-axe and a few hand axes.
He raced through the jungle rumbling the ground as he went.

The tree branches slapped him every few seconds, and everything looked the same, it was all green, everything. At one point Khan thought that he was lost.

Finally when he couldn’t move his legs much longer, he saw the source of the smoke, but he couldn’t believe his eyes, he saw a kid in a circle of smoke, and he had a stone in his hands. He went so fast that his legs couldn’t keep up with him. He tried to pick the kid up, but he was hotter then hell itself. Luckily there was a river a couple dozen meters away. Despite how hot the kid was, he took his chain mail off and he took off his shirt and ripped it in half.

Khan looked very fat, but he had a lot of muscle so he didn’t have any stretch marks.
He wrapped half of the torn shirt around each arm. Khan ran so fast that not even his spirit could keep up with him, but only a couple meters away his shirt begun to burn off. A couple more meters his shirt was burnt to ashes, but he could see the river and he had no choice, he threw the kid as hard as he could into the river, and steam came everywhere out of the water. Swiftly, Khan dived into the deep river and dragged the kid out of the blistering hot water. The water’s current was really strong, but Khan easily got out.

When he got the kid out of the water and to safety, the kid was wearing a burnt brown shirt. He was wearing woolen boots, and he had shaggy brown hair with brown eyes. He was also pale white, and smelled like smoke. Khan noticed that he was a human, and Khan was a full foot smaller.
Khan was worried that the kid may have been a demon so he didn’t want to tell any of the other dwarves. Unable to take the boy to the village to nurse him to health, he started to set up camp.

Khan went by the river, and he got his chain mail back, and he put it on. His chain mail had sparkling silver on it, but it’s as hard as dragon scales.

He took the biggest axe he had with him, stumbling; he gave it a heavy swing, cutting into the tree. “A few more swings should bring this tree down.” Khan whispered to himself.

He heard a small rustling behind him, guessing it was just an animal, he pulled out a small hand axe, a small fast weapon great for agile targets. A small noise came from the bushes near the river next to the kid. If this were a demon trying to kill the boy for any reason, he wouldn’t be able to reach him in time, so he took his chances in throwing the axe. Flying threw the air, the axe smashed through the skull of a rabbit. He walked over to it and pulled out his bloodshed axe from the rabbit. He walked over to the river while holding his small source of food to clean his hand axe and skin the rabbit.

Walking over to a tree, he tore down a few leaves and sat them between two small rocks near the kid and the river. Khan gathered up some dried up leaves to fuel the fire. He searched for something to start the fire, preferably stones or flint. He made due with what he had so he grabbed a small rock and rubbed it onto another rock. He knew that it would take a long time, but he simply couldn’t tell the other dwarves or leave the kid. He looked for a sharp rock and succeeded in a short time. He began rubbing the sharp rock onto the other rock and he kept it up for a couple of seconds and then little sparks began to spew out. He kept rubbing for a few more minutes more and more sparks came out, and finally he began to have a fire. He didn’t want to lose the fire so he put twigs on the leaves and he began to work his way up, and eventually he had a roaring fire.

Khan grabbed a nearby stick, sharpened it, and put the rabbit through the stick beginning to cook. He cooks the rabbit for a few hours, and the rabbit begins to turn a little brown. Khan cuts the rabbit to see if the inside was hot, he thought it was warm, but he decides to cook the rabbit for a little longer. Moments later the rabbit was cooked thoroughly enough to eat, and just as he was going to take his first bite, he heard something creeping up to him he looked over to the kid, pulling up his axe almost slitting his throat.

“Don’t do that! It creeps the hell out of me.” Khan roared.

“Sorry, I didn’t mean to creep up on you, where are we?” the kid said with a little fear in his voice. The kid’s voice was very faint.

“We are in the jungle near Brimeer, and you’re in the land of Carasa, one of the only lands left to fight back against the evil king, Auroson. Khan’s words were full of dignity.

“Whose Auroson?” The kid said. The kid looked desperate for answers. He stared blankly at Khan.

“You don’t know who Auroson is?” Said Kahn suspiciously. Khan stood up and startled the kid.

“What the heck is your name? Where did you come from? What is that stone? After each question Khan’s head hovered closer and closer to the kid’s. It’s time you told me some answers.”
The kid stared horrified and for a long moment he couldn’t speak. Eventually he said, “My name is Nova, but I can’t remember much. I just remember getting really hot, and then I blacked out.”

“Well what is that stone?” Khan was sharply staring at him, and he tensed his shoulders.

“I… I can’t tell you,” said Nova hesitantly.

“You are in no position to be keeping secrets.” Khan said sharply. “I saved your life! A bulging vain formed on his neck.

Ok, I’m sorry. It’s…. a… gift it’s a gift from my father.” Said nova.

Khan grew very frustrated. “Well what is it? Khan roared.

“It’s… a… it’s a dragon egg.” Nova looked straight down and looked as if he didn’t say anything.
Khan just stood there and looked like he just gave in. Khan was actually looking relived. He relaxed his shoulders and his neck was back to normal. “Do you want something to eat?”

Nova seemed surprised “Um… yes sure.”

Khan tore off the blistering hot meat as if it were nothing and gave it to Nova. As soon as Nova touched the meat he let go and the piece of meat fell to the ground. Kahn let out a quick chuckle. Nova did this several times until the meat was cool enough to eat.

“My name is Khan and I am the leader of Brimeer.”

“What’s Brimeer?” Asked Nova.

Brimeer is home to the dwarfs. It is one of the smallest cities, but we all do our best to help the king.

“I see, but how did you become the leader of the dwarfs?”
“There is a tournament every year. Actually, it’s just in a couple days. You can watch it if you like.”

“Really? That would be an honor sir.”

Still, suspicious, Nova reminded himself that he was still confused. “Wait a minute. “How did you even find me?” I was in the middle of the forest. Khan ripped off another piece of meat, and there was a long moment of silence.

“Well, I woke up in the middle of the night with screaming and yelling. I looked up at the sky and it was blood red, and I could barely breathe. Khan took another bite of the meat before he spoke again. Nova waited anxiously for Khan to swallow his food. “Smoke filled the town.” At first I thought it was a fire, but the smoke was coming from the trees, and then I thought….” He paused for a moment. “Well anyways I raced back to my hut and grabbed every weapon I could.” Nova quickly interrupted.

“Wait a minute why did you grab so many weapons?” Nova said with a curious voice.

Khan thought for a moment wondering what to say. “Kid that’s another story, and I really don’t want to talk about it. I don’t even want to think about it.” Khan’s words were very harsh.

“Oh sorry, please continue.” Nova said quickly.

“Well, after I grabbed my weapons I also grabbed my armor. Then I raced out of my hut, and went straight into the smoke. Nova listened very intently and pushed his head more toward Khan’s. ”Well, then I saw you and you were really hot so I threw you into the river.”
Nova stared blankly at the grass until Khan said,” so how old are you kid.”

Khan grabbed a smooth rock and began sharpening his axe. ”I’m 14.”

Khan reminded himself that he was still curious of Nova. Khan stopped sharpening his axe and said, “how long have you had that egg and when will it hatch?”

Nova grabbed the last piece of meat that was still hot. “I’ve had it for 3 months, and it will hatch in about 10 days.” Nova said.

Khan grabbed his chin, and said, “then you better leave in 10 days.”
Nova set back, but he didn’t say anything.

“How did you get here?” Asked Khan

“It’s kind of a long story.”

“What else do we have to do?”

“I guess you’re right. It’s all coming back to me. It started in a forest. It was a group of people, and we got lost. Pretty soon it turned night, and I couldn’t see a thing. We were ambushed, and we all scattered.

“Who attacked you?” Asked Khan

“I don’t know. I couldn’t see much. was too dark

Well anyways, some of us knew magic, but I was the only one with a dragon egg of course. I watched some of them die. Then anger took me, and I grabbed a large stick, and I smashed it against one of the their heads. It dazed him only a moment and then it grabbed me and threw me to the sky and I went down with a big thump. I was very confused and delirious. Someone in the group saw this, and did a spell that I couldn’t hear. Then I got really hot and I woke up here. He must have transported me.

“I see.”

Khan threw a medium sized log in the fire. “So, have you thought of a name for it?” Khan pointed to the egg.

“Yes, his name is Thorgon.”

Khan smiled. “Good strong name kid.” “Now we should get some rest.” “We have a big day tomorrow.”

dude, don't triple post it's bad

nice, i liked it.. now i have to read your other ones.. i hope they are as good

Chapter 2: A New Road

“Kid wake up.” Khan said. “We have a bid day ahead.”
Khan had an axe tied to his belt, and a bag full of weapons and supplies. He also had a strange bow peaking out of his bag.

Nova groaned as he got up, and he stretched. “Where are we going?” Nova asked.

“Brimeer, my village.” Khan poured a bucket of water on the once roaring fire. “Now my boy, there is some rules you must follow.”

“Like what?” Nova stared at Khan very intently.

“When you meet a dwarf, you always clash your fist against your chest.” “And never look down upon them, move your eyes down not your head.”

“Well I’m glad he said that, I would have never thought of that.” Nova said to himself.

“Never touch a dwarf’s weapon. Ever. And that’s about it. You ready?”

“Yea, just a sec.” Nova grabbed his egg gently. “Ok, I’m ready.”
They hiked through the woods quickly, and neither of them spoke. Everything was green. The only thing that kept them from getting lost was Khan’s gigantic footprints when he ran through the forest and found Nova.

All nova could here was animals screeching, and yelling. They walked and walked, but they still didn’t get to Brimeer. Nova finally got suspicious and said, “are yo sure you know where you’re going?”

Khan came to an abrupt halt. Well, khan said, “we should have been their a long time ago, but my foot prints are still their.” Hmm, maybe it’s an illusion… then suddenly there was a rustling in the bushes.

Khan immediately drew his axe. “Stay behind me boy!”

A branch fell from one of the small trees. “What is it?” Asked Nova. It got real quiet until Nova heard something crack behind him, and something started to rip his way from the trees. Khan and Nova sharply stared at the trees. Another branch fell behind them. Nova and Khan immediately turned around, and saw a gigantic spider rip its way from the trees. It stood up on three legs
exposing its stomach.

The spider was a ferocious creature. It had black hair with red stripes on its back symbolizing that it’s poisonous. Its legs were somewhat skinny, but its height more then made up for it. Its legs stood so tall, Khan would have to raise his axe above his head to get to its stomach. Its fangs had saliva dripping down, and they were kicking. Its eyes were big, and dark brown.

Khan threw one of his hand axes, but the spider easily dodged it. Its fangs went up and down ready to eat. Khan fearlessly ran at it with his war-axe, but when he got close, the spider stood up again and smashed Khan with its legs as it went down. Khan flew back and hit the ground terrified. The spider jumped 15 feet in the air trying to crush him.

“It’s now or never.” Thought Nova. He threw one of his hands at the spider and groaned, Igniyay! A gust of wind flew out of his hand, and The spider slammed backwards into a tree, and screeched in pain. Then it fell… dead.

Khan was speechless for a moment. “How did you do that? Why didn’t you tell me you could perform magic?”

“I… guess… I was afraid.”

“It makes sense I guess. A mere boy with a dragon egg, I should have known. Ok… who the hell gave you that egg! Dragon eggs are only given to people who swear oaths to fight back against Auroson and his kingdom, Ignayon!

“You’re right; you do have to swear oaths. Look, I was given this egg by the elves, and the ancient Komaney taught me a little magic. They wanted me to learn most of the magic on my own. They said that I was the chosen one, but I didn’t want this. I didn’t want this responsibility.”

“You were raised by the ancient Komaney? That must have been an honor.

“Yes it was, but it was really hard work. They actually even didn’t really teach me that
much magic, they just taught me a lot about my dragon. He will be ruby red. He will grow massive, but they couldn’t tell me if he would abandon me or not.

“Abandon you?” Asked Khan

Yea, I mean what did you think, that my dragon would just like me and he’ll let me ride him and help me fight back the empire?

Khan chuckled. “I guess you’re right kid”

Nova let out a heavy sigh.

After their conversation was done, they walked a little more, and Nova noticed a small building.

“Behold Brimeer, The city of the dwarfs!” Khan shouted.

Nova stared into the beautiful city. There were many small, but very wide stone buildings that seemed withered. There was a blacksmith, a battleground, an item and weapon shop, and even a mill. Nova and Khan hiked more to the city when Nova noticed something running towards them.

“Broniak!” “How are things doing my friend?” Khan said.

Broniak had long gray hair, and a gray mustache. And like Khan he had a giant war-axe. His armor was silver-plated. He had chain boots and leather gloves, and to match his armor, he had a giant silver helm. Nova stood a full foot above him.

“Not good.” Said Broniak. His voice was full of wisdom and was very deep ”We have many injured, but luckily none dead.

Khan cursed something Nova had never heard before. “How badly injured?”

“Well, we have two who probably won’t last the night, and one who might make it.”

“It’s a shame. Oh, I’d like to intruduce you to my friend Nova.”

Like Khan said, Nova didn’t look down upon him. “Hi sir, it’s a pleasure to meet you.” Nova clashed his own chest with his fist like Khan said.
The pleasure is all mine. Said Broniak. Broniak also clashed his chest the same way, and walked away.

As Khan and Nova walked through the city, all Nova heard non-stop clanging of swords and axes. Nova noticed that many of them were actually amateur.

“Well Nova thought to himself, everyone has to start somewhere.”

“Now my boy lets get you a weapon. What do you want, a sword or axe? Or would you like to start out with a bow or dagger?”

“I have to get a weapon already? I mean I just got here. What’s the hurry?”

“Animals and creatures of the night have been corrupted in these parts for some time. They attack almost every night. Its usually minor, our archers can usually bring them down, but sometimes there’s large groups of animals that threaten our troops.”

As they approached the blacksmith they noticed that swords, daggers, axes, and even bows hood along the wall. The building had “Blacksmith” carved on the top of the building.

Nova smelled smoke and heard a hammer clashing into a sword. The sword was molten hot and red.

The blacksmith had a huge red beard, but his head was nearly bald. The hammer that he held was gigantic. He had black suet on his once shining silver chain mail, and all over his face. He wore silver boots. His gloves were tapered and worn out. He was very fat, but he must have been as strong as Khan. His eyes were green.

“Now kid what would you like?” Said Khan.

“Uh well… how about a sword?”

“Excellent choice.”

“Can I help you?” The blacksmith’s voice was very low.

“Yes, one of your finest swords, please.” Said Khan

The blacksmith nodded his head and said,” yes right away. Pick anyone that you like.”

Nova noticed a long broad sword that had a dragon on the handle. The blade was dark green and it heightened over all the other swords.

“What one would you like my boy” Said Khan

Nova felt nervous, they were piercingly staring at him. “Um… that one.” Nova pointed at the sword.

The blacksmith’s eyes turned wide. “That one, he said, is very expensive. It is my finest sword.”
“How much?” Said Khan.

“Nothing less then 300 coins.”

Nova stared at the ground knowing that he wouldn’t get the sword.

There was a long moment of silence, and Khan said, we’ll take it.” Khan pulled out his pouch and began counting the coins.

The Blacksmith sighed, “very well. The sword is yours.”

“Thank you.” Said Nova.

When the blacksmith got the sword and sheathed it, he handed it to Khan.
Khan drew it and admired the sword. “This is a very fine sword Nova. Take care of it.”

Nova nodded his head. “I will sir.”

Nova and Khan ventured through the town, looking through shops and meeting people. Finally, when Nova’s legs were exhausted, they went to the battlefield.

They all, of course, were dwarfs. Nova saw one field full of fighting, but there was another field just as large, right beside it, and there was none in it.

“Khan, what is that other field for?”

Khan chuckled. “That field is for magic users.”

“Oh, but why isn’t there anyone in it?” Nova said.

Khan suspected this question. “There is only one magician left here, but he is a master. None of us seem to care about magic. We only care about swordsmanship.”

“Why? Isn’t magic one of the most important tools for battle?”

“Because the dwarfs are the weakest race for magic, therefore most don’t use it.
We leave the magic to the elves.

“What is the magician’s name?”

“He is a rather mysterious character. None knows.”

“You’ll meet him soon enough, he’s going to the tournament tomorrow.”

Nova wanted to ask more questions, but he decided that he knew enough.

“So, kid you want to get some rest?”

“Yea sure, I’m exhausted.”
They walked just outside of the city, and came across a medium sized hut made of wood.
“Welcome home.” Shouted Khan.
When Nova went inside, he saw many axes on an area of the wall. There was an upstairs, but it only had one room.
Khan said, “Let me take you to your room.”
Khan went into one of the only rooms in the hut where a small bed laid.
“Good night kid.”
“Good night.”

I hope you put more in. It is turning out great.

I really Like it it's awsem! I hope you post some more up. I cna't wait!

I'm really woried about copy writers

Yeah i'm worried about that too, with my story, but you just got to take a leap of faith and get it heard becuse if you don't who will?

mabye i can make you a copyright smiley

Here's a warning here: Warning do not copy any orignal work of these good people, or suffer great consaquinces! I might just sue you!

i realy like it but i want to read more

Yes good question, this is an exellent book but please put more, It rocks

i like it alot but its incomplete so reading it was weird

That is an excellent start. You have a good theme and you seem to know where your story is going. What it needs is a good editor, and some fleshing out though.
All together though, 2 thumbs up... I can't wait to read more.

I love it u should definitly write more

Q have u written a complete story line yet?

I got bored quite quickly, but only because the grammar is exceptionally bad. I see barely any comma's, speech marks are in the wrong places, and there are odd spelling mistakes.
But who am I, a sweet eleven year old told he can write like a sixteen year old to criticise. Keep up the good work, and you may be successful; but may I suggest you make your sentences longer?
Other than that, amazing, spectacular, plot needs abit twitching, though.

u litle insulter....it was perfect!!!!!!
but on some parts ur right
give us anotbher story

Who cares if there is grammer mistakes aslong as they finsh it and edit it

HE probably dissapeared. GA was missing fo a while but she came back!!!!!