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An imcompleate short story
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Gryndel_2006
Wise DragonRider
Joined: September 15th, 2006, 6:10 pm Posts: 1128 Location: Current: Texas workin' butt off.
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An imcompleate short story
Journey in the land of Driagot....Chapter 1
I’m going to take you on a journey, to a far away time and place. Try to imagine a time with Wizards, Dragons, Kings and magical creatures called unicorns.
“Hello there Young adventurer, are you ok?” asks a strange voice. “Your head has a mighty gash.” You sit up and touch your forehead, and your hand feels something wet and sticky. You bring your hand down and notice that its coated with blood. “Can you talk?” asks the strange voice again. You quickly look around to see where the voice came from. “Up here,” says the voice once more. You look around and see the tree that your sitting under looks back at you! “Why are you so surprised? Haven’t you seen an Ent before?” says the voice.
You slowly shake your head. “Then you must be from the plains. The name is Oakwash my friend!” says the friendly Ent. “And to whom do I own the quiet and bizarre welcome to?” You quickly make a name up to protect yourself from any others listening in. “D’ran, D’ran Blacks.” “Hello D’ran, for a second there I thought that gash on your head stopped your speech!” says Oakwash. “So what part of the plains are you from?” You think momentary, “I can’t remember.” You finally say. Oakwash strokes his beard, “Then I guess it would be foolish to ask why you fell on me then…” You look around for awhile before asking, “Where am I?” Oakwash laughs deeply, “Why Driagot of course! To be more exact, Irontree grove, More a forest then a grove when you think about it. You repeat the words slowly inside of your head. “I wonder if those delightful little woodtrolls are up yet.” says Oakwash. At that moment you notice that you are hungry. “Would you like a lift there? It’s a long way for an injured one.” Oakwash asks. You gladly take up on his offer. On the way there you notice a giant log quiver and take off into the air covered in purple flame. Oakwash shakes his head, “Those blasted spark frogs. Every time one of them lands on a lufwood log it makes it burst into flames.” You wonder why the log flew when it was lit. “Lufwood becomes buoyant when on fire master D’ran.” Just then a strange creature lands on you with huge ears and a small body. “What did I tell you about sneaking up Teasel?” asks Oakwash. “Sorry about that, its just that its so much fun!” Says the strange being called Teasel. You begin to wonder what type of creature Teasel is and how he read your mind. “I am a Nightflect Master D’ran. Also these ears enable me to hear anything and everything, sorry if I didn’t tell you Master D’ran.” says Teasel. Up the path a ways, Teasel hears something. “What is it old friend?” asks Oakwash. Teasel quickly tells Oakwash to be quiet and to not move. “There is an enormous Hoverworm around, I can hear him moving.” You begin to look around to see where the hoverworm is at. Then it appears just a little ways away from where Oakwash is standing! It looks like a log with multiple air ducts out of the bottom of it. The air ducts constantly spewing out a gas that smelled of stale milk mixed with rotten eggs. It had eyes that were in a circle around a gaping mouth of rows and rows of teeth dripping with yellow venom. “Stay still,” says Teasel. “Its hungry, very hungry.” The Hoverworm spews more foul gas out of its front vents to rear up and poise to strike. Before it has a chance to strike, a swarm of Splicters, a small rat-bird-shark creature, swoops down after the hoverworm. Both the hoverworm and the splicters, disappear into the forest to your left. A sickening scream followed by an explosion of gas rings out of the forest. “Lets go before another hoverworm shows up,” says Oakwash. You wonder what the venom of a hoverworm might do to you. “A hoverworm’s venom will make you bloat up with very buoyant air until you reach High Sky Master D’ran. Its very dangerous,” Says the Nightflect Teasel. “Thank you
Teasel, for reading my mind again,” You say. Teasel shrugs and says, “Its what I’m here for.”
Tell me what you think and if its worth make more chapters about.
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September 23rd, 2006, 9:56 pm |
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Valkyrie
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That's really good Nick.
_________________ Before you talk, listen. Before you react, think. Before you spend, earn. Before you criticize, wait. Before you quit, try. ~ Ernest Hemingway. You have enemies? Good. That means you've stood up for something in your life. ~ Winston Churchill ... Bad Wolf
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September 24th, 2006, 12:18 am |
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ladyofthelost
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Joined: October 17th, 2006, 5:56 pm Posts: 854 Location: somewhere, there's no gravity, and common sense has died, guess where i am cause i don't have a clue
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It's really good but the use of ents might be counted as plagerism
you could change the name.
But apart from that it's very good!
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October 17th, 2006, 6:23 pm |
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Gryndel_2006
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Thanks Ladyofthelost, however, I do not think that the race of Ent's are copyrighted to only one person. Many diffirent people have diffirent ways of seeing what an Ent looks like. My version is a giant man with leaf like hair and beard with bark like skin. If you had belived it to be like Tolkien discribed it, then you had it wrong. Also a spark frog is purple! Purple and hyper. Thats for anyone who may have seen a spark frog in a book before. I havn't but just incase.
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