Name: Blaser

Age: 45

Gender: Male

Skills: Craftmanship, Dragon rider and archer

Race: Elf

Hair: White

Eyes:Blue

Home Village: Osilon

Parents: Mother is called Sabrina. Father is called Blake. He never really knew them as they were killed when he was 5

Siblings: None

Chracter Personality: Generally kind and somtimes arrogant. Never walks away from a fight unless he is outnumbered by strong enermies. Brave and not afraid to stand up for he belives in. Hates huntsman, slavers and Urgals. Good at following orders and not afraid to go on dangerous missons. Can sometimes be to hastity and rush into things. Would kill an Urgal if he saw one straight away and would never help them. Wants to help the varden resuce a dragon egg as he feels useless if hes not fighting. Spends most searching the Hadarac desert for slaves to resuce from slavers. Never eaten meat and can't look at an animal being killed or eaten.

Chracter History: Fought a Shade when he was very young and was almost killed. Family was killed when he was 5 by 3 shades and 100 Urgals. Then spent the next 10 years under the care of a dragon rider.The dragon rider raised him and taught him magic and how to cast spells. At 13 he met Oromis.

At 15 a dragon egg hatched for him. Then he spent 10 years tracking the Shades. At 25 he encounted the Raz'ac and lost almost due to overconfidence. Then he continued his search for the shades. Then discoverd that 2 had been killed so he followed the remaining shade but can't get to him as he is in Ur'bean. Killed 2 people with one arrow at 40. Defended Fathen Dur at 44 by attacking the rear of the army.

Wepons: Yellow Rider's Sword called Let'hil and Elven bow. A dagger in his left boot.

Likes: Flying over the Hadarac Desert, learning the anicent language and making armour with dwarfs. Pratising magic, talking with Blade and looking at nature.

Dislikes: Meat, Slaughtered animals, pirates, the sea and the Empire

Animal Companions : Dragon, rides a horse called Thorn and is somtimes joined with a werecat called Maud.

Chracters Physical Description: Tall, has muscley arms, can not run fast and has his face covered in scars from fights. A bandage around the leg from where a shade stabbed him. Has size 12 feet , huge hands and legs are very thin. Has a big birthmark on his right leg. His ears are not very pointed at the edge. Is 6'5ft, weighs 100kg and has size 13 feet. Has a very light tan. Wears a bright yellow ring. Wears a green shirt and blue leather trousers. Has leather boots and a gold braclet.

Dreams For The Furture: To kill a Shade and to end the slave trade. To help the varden defeat the Empire and to rescue a dragon egg.

Reason for the Dreams: A shade killed his family and he wants revenge and it's not fair to sell people so it must end. The Empire should fall so people can be free and the egg should be resuced so the won't be another rider for the Empire.

Side: Varden and the elves

Dragons Name: Blade

Age: 30

Gender: Male

Parents: Rido and Skimo

History: Hatched to Blaser when he was 15. Helped him search for the shades and almost defeated the Raz'ac but they flew away when he was 10. Helped destroy them. Somtimes delivers messenages from the Varden to the elves. Once defended Fathen Dur from invasion while Blaser attacked the army from behind. Met Brom and Oromis twice. Only met 3 other dragon riders. Has seen Galbatorix 3 times in Uru'baen. Learnt dragon training Glaedr from the age of 3. Has rescued 100 slaves and brought them to safety in the varden.

Personality: Gets angry quickly and hates meat. Stands it ground and somtimes disobeys order or questions them. Hates being wrong, sometimes bossy. Will punish anyone who insults him or Blaser. Hates shades and the Forsworn. His claw are as sharp as knives and he rarely trusts anyone unless their a rider or Blaser said their trustworthy. Is also good at guessing riddles and making them. Mainly flys around the Beors mountains / Hadarac desert searcing for slavers to kill. Is hard and will tear an traitorous dragon to pieces before they can say PLEASE LET ME LIVE.

Colour: Yellow

Apperance: Has big strong legs and a bulky back has a hole in left wing from javerlin. Has long sharp teeth caperble of riping a Kull in 2. Has a scar going across the left eye from when he attacked the Ra'zac. A scar on his belly where the armour was puntured. The armour he wears in yellow and relfects sunlight to blind the enermy. Has 2 twisted horns coming out the head. His scales are very bright and rough. Theres are a chunk of flesh missing from an axe blow in the leg whist defending a group of slaves. There are several rows of spikes going down his back.

Armour: Dwarf battle armour

Dreams for the Furture: To have find a mate and to start a family

Reason for dreams: It is loney flying around because theres never any other dragons around and he want kids.

defently not enough, you need more in almost every thing

i editing i now

You need alot more detail

put space bettwen each thing so its easyer to read

is that enough detail?

no, look at the accepted to see how much detail you need

i looked at one it was like 20 for chracter personality

i think your persontailty is good but you need alot more history and discription

mainly for dragon

For both need alot more of History and discription

At least 4 more lines of history (Both Dragon and Rider). Look at either Svit-Kona's or mine to see how long a good characters history should be.

Yeah, or Glenwing's. Those 3 are the ones that are the standards.

i checked yours and i'm sure i have enough

It is really long. I'm personally not a fan of using book characters or names in RPG's, though.

i can't think of other names
who acepts the RPG

me...isnt that character a bit too strong. Everyone will hate him.

wat do u mean

He is too strong.

i'll change it then
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done his arms are weedy and don't bulge with muscle
do u decide if the profile is acepted and y did u vote no

u dont get it...

please explain in idiots words then cos i can be stupid sometimes

You are god-modding a bit, which means that your character is too strong and will tower over others with power. God-Modding is...well...unfair.

No one wants to join RPG's where there is God-modding because one character can control and beat everything,

wat bits should i change then

I don't have time to do all of it, I'll finish later, but the parts I highlighted.

Edit: Done. Glenwing, Shade, feel free to tell me if you agree

Ummm, I cant see any highlights. Is something wrong with my comp? or have I gone color blind lol?

Wierd, they aren't there anymore, they were in red . . . why isn't it staying highlighted?? Oh, are you editing? Anyway, here is the stuff I still don't like:

Hair: Brown

Fought a Shade, killed a total of 100 Urgals and 50 of the Empire's soldiers.

Wiped out a whole tribe of Kull at the age of 40 with help from varden. Took out the of an army back using archery with 500 other archers at 44.

Burnt as least 70 Kull. Discovered an Urgal Tribe and helped destroy them.


And the names, but oh well.

Svit-Kona, sorry to ask, but how do you edit someone elses post?

you click edit like you do for your post. some phpbb versions and IPB versions make you click "Moderate this thread" or something like that first...

i edited it all u high lighted but also deleted colour
i changed the names but i kept the bit bought the shades
and changed hair colour

so i think i've pretty much done it then
i think i'm aloud to double post cos there a gap of 24hrs

Well, you may wish to recheck your spelling (Empie?)

done
is it still god modding
if not will it be accepted
if so wat bits

accepted.