name: vordon elric
age: 18
gender: male
job/specialty: alchemist
race: human/elf (halfling)
hair: blond
eyes: green
body: elvin body. 5 feet 10 inches
village: windham
parents: alphonse elric, elf, male, salldone elric, human, female
siblings: none
character personality: friendly, serious, likes to be with others, good to be with
charecter history: father died when he was 5, started hunting for with village at the age of 10,
character's good personality traits: is very intelligent, is patient, friendly
character's bad personality traits: unleashes a demon like form when is angry,
weapons: mithril long sword. steel kite shield
likes: reading, compitition, running, swimming, ramen noodles
dislikes: the elf Ellren, hot weather
animal companians: wolf
characters physical description: silver ring, cotton tunic: leather belt: iron dagger,
dreams for the future: warrior
reasons for dream: would like to destroy any evil that would harm his family
alignment/side: elvin side

more history, appearance and personality. Not just one worders, letters and lines, punctuation. Physcial descriptions as well, height, face, body. Strap up with the runescape weapons. Poor show.

put in spaces between information

Waaaay more history, and please put lines between the characteristics. If I am going to have top say that to all the applications, then I will, unless Wing tells me to stop.

TOO SMALL!!! Longer everything!

lol my history is twice as big as ur whole thing

WAY TO SHORT. You need to add alot more in personality, history and apperance.

those names seem very familiar and for some reason they remind me of metal body parts and ninja tricks

plus i would add more of what glenwing said

Listen....all of you. Please only moderators post here! Your not mods, its not your job to tell people so with the exception of me, Svit-Kona and Shade of Fear DONT POST.