I stared out the window of the family car. I had to sit in the backseat because my mom said she'd rather not have me drive all the way from Georgia to Kansas City, Missouri even though I have a license. The morning before the big move my mom had given me the "Kary you are not old enough to drive long distances" talk so that’s why I’m stuck here next to my twerp little sister Bridget. During the first day of our trip she kept saying haw she would never have as many friends as I did. And I got stuck telling her that she’ll make plenty of friends at Eastgate her new middle school
well we finely made it to K. C. our new house is pretty big and I got to pick my own room its huge and has a walk in closet and its own bathroom. When we pulled in to the street our new house is on I saw a bunch of people my age so I know I won’t be lonely. While I’m busy unpacking there’s a knock on the door. When I go open it there’s a group of girls wanting to say hi to me. I invited them in and introduced myself then a girl stepped up and said that her name was Maddy and the girls behind her were Melissa, Jullianna, Devon, and Laura. I take them to my room to watch tv and listen to music. We started talking and i told them that i was from gorgia they all looked at me crazy like i was an alian. When i asked why they were looking at me like that, Devon said "I thought that people from gorgia didnt have very much cool music. I thought there was just contry."
Then I just burst out laughing at the thought, I mean just country, heck, i don't even like country! When they asked why I was laughing, I told them that I absolutly hate country. After that we just talked and when it turned to 6:00 they said they had to go home so i said good bye.
When school started everyone was asking where i got that acent, so I just had to keep telling people that I was from Gorgia.

pleez post what u think
why desent anyone post!!!

i am sorry but i must double post to get ppls atention pleez post

Hi i'm posting and i know just how you feel
It's good but you need to change a few things.
First of all show us who you are
then introduce your family in a bit more detail
like where's your dad?
Then talk about your house in detail
add colour a garden something you love
say something like "My room wasn't the biggest, or the brightest, in fact it was the attic but it was perfect. Perfect and private, no annoying sisters up here"
Then say i went out to look around town and found those girls
have actual speech
it looks rushed
this is a lot of criticism sorry
you can comment on mine it's my world or something
do not read the poem it is to bad

no no no its okay i want critisisim [ pardon the spelling ] it helps writers to improve with their wrighting

Can you look at mine
it's called my world
it's very different to yours

i have and it is very good

Thanks
our ideas are very different
have you ever moved house and school?
I have

yes when i was going into 1st grade

I"ve changed school 6 times excluding nursery and going up to secondary school

i've never finished a full term...

That must be hard
i've always been bad at moving
it takes me a month or two
to make a friend
and another month to fit in

ive only changed schools at the end of the year and ive changed schools 4 times

Are you going to put some more on

yes right now

Thats really good! Cant wait to hear some more!

neither can i!

im glad that u like it