Name: Klyenzia my brother calls me KiKi
Age & Gender: I am a 22 year old female

Occupation: I am an apprentice to the local apothecary. My brother and I run a small farn outside of Yasuac. I also earn extra for doctoring the locals farm animals and a few pets.

Race: Human
Hair: Long and straight, usually worn in a single, thick braid dowm my back. It's the color of a ravens wing.
Body: Petite. Slender, but well muscled. Strong arms and legs.

Home village: I was born in Teirm and lived there until disaster struck my family. My younger brother and I were taken in by my Uncle Gerald and his wife Catherine, when I was 8 and my broher was 2. We moved onto their farm, 4 miles from Yasuac.

Parents: My father was Richard the Younger. My Mother was Guenivere.
My Father worked for the King, I have no idea what his position was. My Uncle would never talk about it. One night, several of the King's soilders busted down our door, they stabbed my Father to death. The soilders tied my Mother and sister up and threw them into the back of a wagon.
The only thing that saved my brother and myself was the fact that we had crawled out on the roof to sleep. It was a hot night and we liked looking at the stars.
I once overheard that my Mother was sold into slavery and that my sister was given to some man, who was a favorite of the King.
Sibblings: My sister is Ellsbeth, she would be 30 years old. The last time I saw her, she was 16.
My brother"s name is Arden, he is 16. We inherited the farm after my uncle's death. Together, we run the farm.

Personality: I am kind and gentle. I have been blessed with two God given gifts; one of course is healing.The second is the most extrodinary; I can communicate with animals of all species by means of telepathy. Each species has their own distinct way of talking with me. For example; a cat can be very scarcastic and likes to play head games, while a dog is very honest and open. That is why I am a vegetarian, except for chicken. Chickens are addle brained creatures.
I was told by the Wizewoman that my gifts would be used to heal Dragons when they arose.

Bad Traits: I am obsessed with having my revenge on Galbatorix. I am just biding my time until the Dragonriders rise up once again. I know it will happen in my lifetime, my destiny is to take care of the Dragons, any injuries or ailments. I have a bad temper when provoked. All of my hatred is focused upon seeing the Empire destroyed. Also, I am not all that comfortable around people. I would much rather be around animals.

I always carry a bow and practice with it daily. I keep a short broad sword on my hip. My most prized possesion is a 7 inch knife with a silver handle in the shape of a dragon's head with rubies inset for the eyes. I keep it sheethed on the inside of my left ankle.

Likes and Dislikes: I love animals, children, and elderly people. I despise anyone who mistreats any of them and I tend to loose my temper. I hate the Empire. I hate Galbatorix and his men.

Animal Companions: I have many. Bella, my black Andalusion is my right hand. Spanish horses are the most intellegent and she is amazing. Then my 4 dogs; Hoots, Mia, Baby, and Keelie. They go everywhere and do everything that I do. They even sleep with me. Each of them would lay down their lives for me. Bella and the dogs are my best friends, we work together and play together.

Physical Description: Of course I wear corsetted blouse with a skirt when the occassion calls for it. But any other time I loose the skirt and in exchange donn a pair of buckskin breeches with knee high black boots. Also, I wear a black leather jerkin sinched at the waist with a belt that holds my sword.

Dreams: To see the return of the Dragonriders and the defeat of the Empire. To see the downfall of Galbatorix. I dream of seeing a Dragon, talking with them and helping them in anyway. I will fight with all my might to see the end tyranny. To see the return of justice and peace.

I can't remember very much about the night my Father was killed and my Mother and sister were taken away. I didn't see any of the faces of the men who destroyed my family.

For some reason, I wasn't logged in when I submitted it.

So it's me Dena Fantasyfan4eve. This was my bio.

I am very sorry, I didn't mean to waste your time. I misuderstood.
I would like an opinion, though.
Is this just not a good character or is it just too long and confusing?

Can you edit a bio. Or should I not waste my time on this character?

Please be honest. I appreciate honesty and take corrective critisism very well.

Again, sorry if I took up your valuable time, but would truely like an opinion since I mistakenly
got your attention.

Thank You,

I like-it's good but Glenwing will probably have some problems with spelling (ironic that I'm saying that) and he will prefer third person...

I think it's really good, but like incomer said, you should use third person. If Glenwing has a problem with it, you can always edit it.

yeh totally, careful, glenwing will freak out ( he can get sorta .....cranky)

It's glenwing's "crankiness" that helps keep SF together and operating properly. Anyway, I like Glenwing.

Yeah he seems to be ok

he is ok but sometimes he gets too cranky

Post in 3rd person, fix grammer. ect., ect. Then it should be all right. Oh, and do not triple post.

Very intriuging character, but you should try to switch out your "I"s, "Me"s, and etc. with "She"s, "Hers"s and so on. Also, do you live with your uncle now, or when? And if you didn't even know what he did, how did you watch your father die while your sister and mother were sold?

Glenwing is normal, I think. He will be fine with that. I'm fine with that. And thats a cool character.

All you have to do is make it third person, apart from that its jim dandy ^^