Name: Argetessa
Age: 21
Gender: Female
Skills: Swordmanship, archery, elemental magic, rudementary healing
Race: Human
Hair: Black
Eyes: Blue
Home Village: Therinsford
Parents: Father: Feron Mother: Etain
Siblings: None
Character Personality: Wild, wilful, proud
Character History: Ran away from home into the spine, parents killed by a bear whilst looking for her, joined the varden as a healer.
Weapons: Longsword, Longbow, daggers.
Likes: Animals
Dislikes: Urgals, slavery
Animal Companions: White stalion, Nimbus.
Character's Physical Description: Tall, thin, with an almost elf like cast to her features.Whers a midnight blue cloak with a hood.
Dreams for the Future: Becoming a rider
Reason for Dreams: Wishes to rid the world of the stain of evil
Alignment/side: The varden and the elves

why did you post this 2 times?

WOW. It needs to be way more longer.

WAY TOO SHORT. Look at some of the accepted ones for length.

Shouldn't it be at least two lines for almost everything? I think it should be at least 6 lines for history and 4 lines for personality.

yea my history is 3 times as large. LOL

Name: Argetessa
Age: 21
Gender: Female
Skills: Swordmanship, archery, elemental magic, rudementary healing
Race: Human
Hair: Black
Eyes: Blue
Home Village: Therinsford
Parents: Father: Feron Mother: Etain
Siblings: None
Character Personality: Wild, she does not like to be controlled, and is very independant. She is determined and will cary on with her task even if it seems impossible. She takes no heed of personal injury, prefering to look after the needs of those she loves. Her major downfall is her pride, she will do anything to prove herself, even if it endangers others and herself. She is also stuborn and unyeilding if she belives herself to be right.

Character History: She an away from home into the spine, after a fight at the vilage tavern. Her parents killed by a bear whilst looking for her. She traveled through the empire while looking for her aunt. She found that her aunt had been killed by empire soldiers,and became an outlaw after killing the soldiers responsable. Was recruited by the varden due to her healing powers, and has worked amoung them ever since.
Weapons: Longsword, Longbow, daggers. Sword has a strange crossgaurd that looks like a V, with runes scroled across it, and down the blade.
Likes: Animals
Dislikes: Urgals, slavery
Animal Companions: White stalion, Nimbus. Born from the same stock as Snowfire
Character's Physical Description: Tall, thin, with an almost elf like cast to her features. Her black hair tumbles loosely onto her shoulders, and has a constantl frizziness to it. She has a small scar across her shoulder from when she got into a fight with the soldiers who killed her aunt. She wears a medium lenght linen tunic, normally russet or marone, with brown leggings underneath and a midnight blue cloak over all.
Dreams for the Future: Becoming a rider, proving herself to the world, and avenging herself further for the injustice she has suffered.
Reason for Dreams: Wishes to rid the world of the stain of evil, and prevent people from being opressed under harsh rulers and arrogant soldiers.
Alignment/side: The varden and the elves

one or two spelling errors...and you know you can just edit your first post.