okay, i'm writing a novel called Darkness(title pending) and i'm trying to write a kind of love scene. i've been stuck here for weeks, and was wondering if some of you could give me a couple of ideas on how to continue. (posted in Fanfic b/c it's my story but i just need help). here's the part i'm stuck on:


“Mom! I’m headed over to the park! I’m gonna’ meet Beckah there!” Hinari shouted, closing the door on his mom’s answer. He ran over to the park as quick as he could, which was a few blocks away and roughly three minutes’ time. He arrived and looked around. There were couples at a lot of the benches. (There would be a few more by the time Wil arrived) Hinari saw Beckah sitting by herself on the third bench on the right. “Bonjour mms. Amherst. Comment allez vous aujourd'hui?” he asked as he approached. ‘How are you today?’ He was smiling.
Beckah looked up. She smiled. “Bonjour M. Riyaka. I’m great. I’ve just been sitting here waiting for you.” She patted the seat beside her. “Sit. I had a reason for asking you to meet me here today.” She bit her lip. Hinari sat beside Beckah, trying to figure this out.
“So what’d you want?” Hinari asked casually. Under the surface, however, his heart was pounding. He looked at Beckah. She was a Pureblood Vampire. Her skin was pale, the color of the full moon. Her lips were ruby red and she had eyes to match. Her hair was shoulder-length and black. She was truly a sight. Today she was dressed in dark, tight denim jeans. She had a taut, low cut shirt that was a charcoal color. Under it was a dark grey shirt. Over it all was a black zip up jacket that looked as if it had lived through a hurricane. Hinari loved hanging out with her, but he’d never actually talked to her one on one.
“Well, I was hoping for some help with Algebra homework, but I accidentally forgot my book.”
“Help with Algebra? On Saturday?” Hinari asked, cocking his head in question.
Beckah smiled. “Yeah. Anyway, I forgot the book so that’s a bust.” She put her hand on his. “But we could always study French.”
“Oui. We could.” Hinari said. He scooted a little closer to Beckah. He looked into her beautiful red eyes.


so...any ideas? i'm stuck.

Take them out of there. it might be a romantic place but they are not dating yet. she forgot her book. It is a good excuse to go somewhere privet like his house or her's. there they can be alone and maybe more intimate since the last thing they are going to do is studing. That is what I would do.

thanks. i figured it out. it's actually pretty good now.

really? where can I read it?