Name- Fankor

Srry I logged out on accident when typing so hers a new one

Age- 24

Gender- male

Skills-
Bow- He was born a huntsmen, trained by his father who was a legend in history with his incredible accuracy with the bow. Fankor was also gifted with his father's accuracy and become his family's main source of food when his father died while being ambushed by a horde of urgals.

Blade- Is not a master of the blade, but has gotten some teaching from an elven friend of his family. He is best at swiching a deffensive block into some overwhelming attacks that impress even his athletic elven friend.


Magic- Fankor is just starting to understand the power of the ancient language. He has been a rider for a little over a year but has explored very little about the mysteries of the lanuguge of the elves.

Race- Human

Hair- Dark brown

Eyes- Hazel/ green

home village- Surda

Parents- When Fankor's father died, it was a very tragic time for the whole village. They had lost one of the village's best. Although it was tragic for all, no one was more devestated then Fankor himself. Fankor was very close to his father, and to make matters worse, he was there watching the whole thing. It all happened one day when Fankor and his father were out hunting. When the two split up, Fankor was startled when he heard his father scream. He quikly ran to the scene only to find his father dead on the ground. Fankor never found out why the urgals attacked his father. Many believe the urgals were looking for Fankor's family bow. It was passed down remaining in his family for hundreds of years. The bow is that of legends. It is said to have special properties about it, but all Fankor and his father have found out about the bow is that it has incredible accuracy! Fankor's mother had to run the family farm along with Fankor as her main helping hand. His mother, Krystal, never remarried but is looked upon a lot by many of the other villigers. Her sons protect her from many of the villigers unless Krystal approved to meet with them.

Siblings- Fankor's mother, Krystal, and his father, also named Fankor had 3 children: Fankor, the oldest, Elizabeth (Lizzy for short)age 17, And also Rarkor the baby of the family ( although he is 13 years old).


personality- Fankor is a very outgoing person. He is always willing to help out anyone with something. If they needed something done Fankor was the one to ask. He wouldn't hesitate to help. He is always to put his family first in everything. When his father died he swore to protect his family from harms way for the rest of his life. He has always hated urgals and the king. Every time the troops come into Surda, they always come looking for him to join the kings army. He would usually hide out in the woods in the back of his house, and his family would say they haven't seen him since his father passed away. There was no way he would serve in the king's army. You could also describe Fankor as a work-o-holic, meaning he works as hard as he can to give his family the best that he can. Fankor, described by his fellow villagers, Is the nicest person you will ever meet, but don't get on his bad side. He will either pay no attention to you or, if you send him or his family a threat, he will be right there ready to fight to the death.

History- Fankor's life was very tough. He had lived on a farm all his life. Hunting was his family's main way of gathering food. To earn money, Fankor's father, being the best shot around, would hold archery competitions and make bets on who can get closest to the target. When Fankor's father died, it saddened him very much. His father was a very inspirational person in his life, giving Fankor the best skill he will ever have, his shot with a bow. For a while, life was calm. Every mourning Fankor would go out and hunt, while his mother, Lizzy, and Rarkor ( when not hunting with Fankor) would work on the farm. This life changed for Fankor one day when he was at the town square. Fankor would sometimes also have archery competitions just like his father. Well one day a foreign trader came into town and challenged Fankor. Fankor accepted and the competition went on. To Fankor’s surprise this outsider was very good. In the end Fankor won. The outsider gave him a topaz colored item which looked like a stone to Fankor. When he went home he kept the stone in his bag in the hay loft of the barn. One night when he was out in the barn, Fankor could of sworn he saw the stone move. As he watched, it moved again, and again, and again until suddenly it shattered open, and out came a topaz colored dragon. He kept the dragon hatchling a secret from his family, until his dragon matured enough to be able to ride. He knew what he must do. He and his topaz colored dragon named Laverra would have to fight against the king and get the world out of these dark times.

weapons-

His bow- His bow, was said to have been made in a foreign land and brought over by the first humans to arrive in Alegasia. it was passed down from ancestor to ancestor, and finally passed to Fankor by his father. It is made out of an unknown material that flexes incredibly far. It can shoot an arrow with precise accuracy up to 150 yards!

His mind- If not His bow you would fear, it would be his mind. Fankor is amazing with solving problems right as there presented to him. He always comes up with alternate plans and strategies for different occasions.

Likes- Fankor enjoys hunting and hanging around with his family and fellow villagers, but the one thing that no matter how blue he is feeling, the one friend who always cheers him up is Laverra

Dislikes- Uragals/ kulls, the king, the king's army, Raz zac, People who talk bad about him his family, friends , or town


Animal Companions- His dragon Laverra

Physical Description- Fankor is your averaged sized person about 5 foot 9 inches and weighs about 150 pounds. He has dark brown hair and hazel eyes. He is very well built( strength wise), and has very keen senses of sight and hearing. In fact his sight and hearing are so keen, that they are said to be able to equal that of an elf's keen senses. If you took a quick glance at him, to you he would look like you average farmer, but he’s way more than that...

Dreams for the future- That the king shall be killed and his kingdom rescued from his evil Grip. Also to become more powerful as a dragon rider and learn the ancient language.

Reasons for dreams- To Long has Galbatorix ruled over Alegasia. He has ruined to many peoples families and lives. No longer shall he have control over Fankor or anybody else.
There are many dragon riders scattered across the nation. Fankor hopes that one day he can meet up with a very wise rider and learn more about the ways of the rider.

Alignment- Good


Dragon name- Laverra

Age- 1 year and 3 weeks

Gender- Female

Parents- Laverra knows little about her parents. All she knows is that her mother's rider was killed by Galbatorix himself ,by a very powerful Unknown spell. This also ment that Laverra’s mother died as well. Her Father, was last known to be alive, but has not been seen in over 20 years, during a great battle against Galbatorix with the varden. The attack failed miserably.

History- When Laverra's egg was laid over 50 years ago, her mother allowed her to chose her rider. When the nesting grounds were attacked, Laverra's mother had no choice but to leave the egg in the hands of her rider's family. One day when her mother was out to battle with her rider, the rider's family was attacked and everyone was kill, and worse, Galbatorix's troops took the egg to him. For the longest time Galbatorix held the egg until one day when a veteran troop of the king's army betrayed him and stole the egg. For many years he wandered with the egg until he found himself betting the egg in an archery competition against Fankor, who Laverra chose as her rider. She swore to one day avenge her mother, and also search for her father, as Fankor swore to help too.

Personality- Laverra has a very shy attitude. She will only talk to you through your mind if you are very close to her, otherwise she will have Fankor do all the talking for her. She is very helpful in making decisions, always agreeing with you or coming up with very good alternate plans. This made her and Fankor and excellent team. She will do anything to protect her rider from danger. She knows her strength and isn’t afraid to use it!

color- Topaz

Description- Her scales shimmer a dark orangeish color in the sunlight. Her neck, filled with signifying spines run to the top of her head. She has very good flying skills, but none of her skills can best her skill of fire breath. When she breathes fire its like an explosion happening right in front of your face. The flame rushes out with incredible heat and force. Fankor belives it has something to do with Laverra's color.

Armor- She has yet to recieve any armor...

Dreams- She of course wishes for what Fankor wishes for, but in her own thought, she really hopes to find and be reunited with her father.

Well that’s it I hope you enjoy. It my first time filling out but i thought i might try to get into doing the rpg.

First thing I notice is that a few of your sentences switch tense: "If you need(option 1: needED) something done Fankor was(option 2: is) the one to ask, he wouldn't(needs an apostrophe, and also would become won't if you went with option 2) hesitate to help." These are supposed to be past tense, so just change need to needed.

You need to remember to make things plural:
kings army -> king's army

You need to remember too add apostrophes to conjunctions:
dont -> don't
wouldnt -> wouldn't
and so on.

Serta.. is that Surda? I'm really not sure, I can't even handle American geography.

You may want to say how his dad died. Not really nessecary, but some of your profile makes me wonder if it was Gally's doing.

Also, you do what I do sometimes (probably most people actually) and capitalize random words. I do it all the time. Like, i'll just be typing this Sentence sometimes and Words like These will end up Capitalized. Not that bad, but you get the point.

The only other things are watching little typos, like "her moth" as opposed to "mother," and hurrying up. Can't wait to see you rping!

Cool thx ill work on my tense a little and the cap thingy too lol ... I was also doing this at like midnight and i don't know bout any1 else but I cant read when im tired so I couldn't see my mistakes lol. Did you want me to go back and add some things about him or its fine. Also am i accepted or...thx though

Just read through it and fix what you see. Especially what I noted, but once you're done you'll be accepted.

Ok I edited it up a bit and also added more about his fathers death in the parents topic. Hope I did a little better.

Better. Still some capitalization, but I'm going for accepted.

There, I fixed up the rest of the caps .... I think? lol