Name: Torjan

Age: 10

Gender: male

Skills: Climbing trees, fightingng with daggers, carving, archery, painting, swimming and can project his mind farther than any other of his race used to be able to, or any race for that matter along with the skill of jumping and climbing quite well out of cat form, and landing with minor injuries from 20 feet, though any higher he would risk breaking bones

Hieght: 5 1/9ft in human form, 2 1/7ft in cat form

Race: Sérgox

Hair: Black, shoulder length (in human form) 1/2" black in cat form

Eyes: Red with blue pupil and normal whites

Skin: Very tanned looking, Sérgoxs have naturally dark skin, but because he lives under trees perpetually so his skin only looks tanned

Home Village: None, has lived in the wilderness all his life

Parents: Xeeyol (dad) Sorqya (mom)

Siblings: only child

Character Personality: He dosen't get angry often, except at the dumb birds who sing at night.... When he does get mad he sits some where in nature, it calms him to have many simple sounds around him, not the birds singing grant it. He's often sad, since he thinks he is the only one of his race left. He has often visited the elves, but sense Maud is not a Sérgox (and she is much older) it provides no respite from the depression of being the one and only of his race. Torjan often dreams of being a dragon rider some day, though he knows this is only a dream.


Character History: when he was born his parents had already fled to Du Weldenvarden, after Galbatorix came to power no Sérgox was safe. He lived happily until he was seven, then his parents died, leaving him alone, in Du Weldenvarden. After his parents died he has always thought him the last of the Sérgoxs, and he trys to live as best he can, his life is simple. Torjan rarely leaves De Weldenvarden, and has never seen his races natural home. As he grew older, and learned more from the elves, things like how to be semiaware, how Eragon learned. So he was always concsuios of what was happening.

Weapons: 10" black dagger that was his fathers, small bow and arrows given by the elves, and a 4" cooking knife of his mothers.

Likes: for the animals to shut up when sleeping, good food, to talk with his mind and to sneak up on a sneaky elf (not that this has ever happened....)

Dislikes: artichokes, rotten food, animals not shutting up when he sleeps, and getting scared out of his wits by a sneaky elf

Animal Companions: one wolf, Darzell, who tried to eat him, but Torjan stopped him with his telepathic abitlities and after a while started liking Darzell, so he asked the elves to give him the ability to project his thoughts into others minds and a longer life, much like Blagden. Only Darzell must speak through his mind.

Character's Physical Description: his hair is shaggy, thick and shoulder length, his body is that of a very tall 11 yr old (very tall for his age) and thin, built for running, his feet are light and quick, he makes almost as little sound as a elf, though not quite. his hands are quick and he is agile like a professinal gymnst.

Dreams for the Future: to find another Sérgox.

Reason for Dreams: he believes he is the only one left.

Alignment/side: Varden, and all who oppose Galbatorix.

Improtant things he has forgotten: How to live like Sérgoxs used to

Unimportant things he has forgotten: Where he put the elves puzzle.... But keeps on thinking, "River, midnight"

Difference between werecats: Sérgoxs can speak with there mouths, solembum and other werecats only speak throug there mind, Sérgoxs can project there mind farther, even though they do not always need it for comunacation. Sérgoxs also are taller in both human and cat form


I know I added to it, but a Sérgox seems a lot like a werecat so I wrote down the differences.
Also, I don't want RPing to be this seriuos get up, so I added some funny stuff.


I hope it gets accepted....

It's a great character. I suggest a few more lines for history and personality, then fizing the grammar and punctuation mistakes. If you do all that, its near perfect.

where is the grammar and puncution mistakes? (i want to know to mess with em)

Places where you didn't put periods and didn't capitalize.

you need a lot more history look at the accepted one like mine(Fanil Kalem)it will give u an idea wat they should be like

you've got sense instead of since twice
but a cool character

a bit more on personality, history and physical description...thats really it

ok, i keep on getting told by my teacher to do ruff drafts, so i guess thats what i did.

hey, i edited it, how is it now?

But its been a couple weeks, plz tell me if its good enough to be accepted!

i like it!

Thank you, lets just hope the RPG team like it enough for it to be accepted, do you have one?

---Flaming Myachi

Why has it been so long since sum1 that acutally has power has posted here? i've been trying and trying to get this accepted and its been 4eva since a RPG team member has said sumtin about it to me. but i doubt me PMing them will help, but i will try.

They're quite busy- there's a lot of characters here now and you know they have lives off the computer too.

sorry, buts it been a really long time, and that gets tiring.

You still need a lot more history.

exaclty how many more lines would it take for you to accept it?
and sorry that i couldn't spell conscuis right

I can't accept. Make it longer than your index finger.

crap, at least thats only a couple of inches....


sorry that it won't get done today, maybe by sunday it will be done....

its good, just lengthen it again then Ill check again, apart from that its fine.

k, sorry i haven't been on, so i haven't really been reading my posts a lot. i will. as soon as i get a chance (4-6 days max) check back in 7 days, and i think i will have it lengethened

sry, was not logged on sum how. is my post though.