Name: Aravis

Age: 16

Gender: female

Skills: climbing, writing, sword fighting, running, and story telling

Race: human

Hair: dark blonde

Eyes: mossy green

Home Village: Binligre

Parents: Father: Somerled. Mother: Davina

Siblings: none

Character Personality: She’s cocky, has a bit of an attitude, openhearted, opinionated, talks a lot, She’s brave and fearless, and a daydreamer.

Character History: Her father mysteriously disappeared a week before her birth, and her mother died giving birth to her. Her mother’s maidservant, Maria, took her in and raised her. Maria now works for Lord Wickam, Aravis’s best friend, Derk’s, Father.

Weapons: Her father’s old sword. With ruby and sapphire stones set into the handle.

Likes: Books, swimming, fire, honest people, dragons, rain.

Dislikes: liars, goblins, any one on the evil side.

Animal Companions: none

Character's Physical Description: big eyes, long dark eye lashes, a dimpled smile, soft cheek bones, long curly hair, button nose.

Dreams for the Future: To join the varden
Reason for Dreams: after learning of her father’s death she suspects that the evil king had something to do with it, so she wishes to join the varden and fight with them.

Alignment/side: Good

Way more history and personality. Same for description. Look at the Accepted ones.

is this better?

Name: Aravis

Age: 17

Gender: female

Skills: climbing, writing, sword fighting, running, and story telling

Race: human

Hair: dark blonde

Eyes: mossy green

Home Village: Binligre

Parents: Father: Somerled. Mother: Davina

Siblings: none

Character Personality: Aravis is complicated that is the best way to describe her. She is open minded at times, but she is also very stubborn. She doesn’t like change, but is always changing. She is cocky, and very opinionated, and that gets her into a lot of trouble. She’s openhearted, and kind. She’s forgiving but she never forgets. She loves to play. She’s childish, but she is also mature. She’s innocent and naïve. She has a thirst for knowledge, and always was ahead in her studies. She loves to learn, whether it’s about, mathematics, history (that’s her favorite), or nature. She’s a “hopeless romantic”, she is always writing love songs, and stories, but she doesn’t know the true meaning of love.
She loves to laugh and smile. She’s always joking around.

Character History: Her father mysteriously disappeared a week before her birth, and her mother died at child birth. Aravis was raised by her mother’s kind maidservant, Maria.
Shortly after Aravis’s birth Maria began to work for lord Torgen. Lord Torgen had a son, Derk. Derk and Aravis grew up together. The were tutored together, learned to sword fight and hunt together also. Aravis mastered the sword at age ten, and she was an expert
hunter by age seven. Aravis got proposed to when she was fourteen, but she refused. She fell out of an oak tree and broke her arm right arm and had to learn to fight, and write with her left when she was fifteen. She broke a boy’s nose in a fight after he grabbed her butt when she was 16, and needless to say no boy has attempted anything like that any more. Two months ago she and Derk were climbing and came upon a cave, and Aravis found a dragon egg. The egg has yet to hatch. But this is where the adventure begins.

Weapons: Her father’s old sword with ruby and sapphire stones set into the handle, and her bow and arrows.

Likes: Books, swimming, fire, honest people, dragons, rain.

Dislikes: liars, goblins, any one on the evil side.

Animal Companions: none

Character's Physical Description: big eyes, long dark eye lashes, a dimpled smile, soft cheek bones, rosy cheeks, thick and long curly hair, button nose, narrow shoulders, slender waist, and small hands. She has a sweet smile, and mean frown. She has this small sparkle in her eyes that makes you smile when you see her. She is deffently not flat chested. She has long athletic legs, slender arms.

Dreams for the Future: To join the varden
Reason for Dreams: after learning of her father’s death she suspects that the evil king had something to do with it, so she wishes to join the varden and fight with them.

Alignment/side: Good

Just a bit more history. and please just efit your old one.

Look at the accepted ones, there is many lines of history and personality. Try to mimic their length.