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 Raven the vampire 
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New Peasant
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Post Raven the vampire
Name:Raven

Age:25

Skills:super speed,ability to heal,fly,fade in to shadows,charm speaker

Race:vampire

Hair:black

Eyes:green

Home Village:dusk town

Parents:none

Siblings:none

Character Personality:Raven keeps to herself like a shadow,she comes and goes in silence,she considers her whole life a shadow,a mere spirit floating from place to place,Raven is a newcomer from beyond the seas that boards Alagasiea,but knows not of her past and plans to keep it that way,Nevtral in all aspects she goes through towns to find her next feed never killing off her human prey,she hates the sun and hates how people make fun of her about what she eats,that's why she stays in the shadows of the night not letting any1 will see her.

Character History:Raven doesn't know anything about her past,her mom and dad died when she was 17 she lives in a dusk town when she was turned into a vampire,she was turned to a vampire by her uncle,her loving cat shadow was also turned,her uncle was shot by a sliver bullet and killed,Raven ran away not knowing what would happen to her,her loving cat shadow fallowed her,he's the only thing the only family she has left they would go to town to town looking for food.then one day they ran into a other vampire that was doing the same thing so she asked him if they could join and he said sure they could join.

Weapons:she has a five foot sword that is very sharp it is unbreackable the color of it is black,green and purple with a blue strip of fabric coming from the end of the handle and she also has 2 pistols hanging from each hip.

Likes:she loves the smell of blood,her cat and her weapons and the color black.

Dislikes:she doesn't like sliver bullets,and she also doesn't like bright lights and people getting into her personal stuff and being made fun of.

Character's physical description:she has black hair and green eyes,her skin is a pale color and has pink lips,she is a vegitarian and she wears tall black high heel boots,she is very quiet and drinks dr. pepper and like to read lots of books loves horses and cats,has very tall legs and arms and skinny fingers,she loves to wear rings,her fangs are very sharp they can tear through anything,she has a tacttoo that starts on her right shoulder climbs up the right side of her neck and covers half of her face.

Dreams of the future:she wants to find out why her uncle turned her and shadow into a vampire, she also wants to find others like her and she wants to figure out why her life is messed up.


May 17th, 2011, 1:27 am Profile
Wise DragonRider
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Post Re: Raven the vampire
I like vampires so this character sound's very good!

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May 18th, 2011, 6:22 pm Profile
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Post Re: Raven the vampire
Please don't post in other bios. It slows the accepting process. If you have questions or would like to comment, a pm is much better. :)

Alright, for your Skills, would you mind expanding a bit for each skill? You need at least three lines of description for each skill type.

For Personality you need twelve lines total, so if you could lay roughly six more lines? Perhaps you could describe how she takes being a vampire, or something similar.

History needs 15 lines total, you need roughly five more. Maybe describe somewhere in the paragraph how she discovered her enhanced abilities as a vampire.

Weapons; modern weapons aren't allowed. Perhaps you could replace the pistols with two crossbows.

Side note; Dr. Pepper doesn't exist in Alagaësia.

Your also missing a few segments: 1; Gender 2; Weakness/Fear 3; Animal Companions 4; and Alignment/Side.

If you need help with paragraph lengths or of what you should have, go to this link. viewtopic.php?f=56&t=8551

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