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Kalte Apfelmus
Wise DragonRider
Joined: June 21st, 2009, 8:52 pm Posts: 1366 Location: U.S.A. and proud of it.
Gender: Guy
Affiliation: Lamp Shade
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kveykva
name:kveyva.
age:22
gender:male
skills:running, the fastest he has gotten is 34mph, avreage is 24mph and can go for 50+miles. Yelling for help, his vioce can carry long distances and is always clear yet he doesn't need to stop for a while.
Race:elf but doesn't know it.(see history)
Hair:black
Eyes:green
Home village:therinsford
parents:unknown
silblings:none
personality: Isn't very brave and would sooner flee than fight. Would belive anything. Likes peace and quiet and scares easly even at small things. Likes it when powerful people protect him. Is terirfied of shades, dragons, elves(again see history) and urgals good or bad. Puts his own life above anything or anybody else but isn't very good at fighting... anything. Doesn't know how to use a bow and arrow although he is good at throwing rocks. Loves to run a lot but doesn't eat very much. Unlike most elves he eats meat a lot and has a big sweettooth. Can't use magic but knows some al words. Is somewhat crazy talks to himself a lot. Doesn't deal with pain very well. Has a bad temper and holds a grudge a long time. Kveykva also is afraid of hights, deep waters and wild anamals. Can be sneaky in forests but anywhere else he is kinda clumsy. He doesn't like long tasks and avoids work as best as he can. Thinks that the best revenge is watching your enemies suffer. He would like it if galbatorix was killed but he's not about to try.
history:When he was 9 therinford was raided by shades he was sepperated from the rest and hit his head on a rock when he fell. Can't remember anything from before not even that he is an elf and lost his magic ability. He renamed him self 'lightning' in the al. For four years he tried to find his way out of the spine with little luck. Finally he came out near Terim. Only to have to flee north to Narda from solders. From there he travled to Ura'baen to try to find out who was most likly to protect him, the varden or Galbatorix. After almost getting caught he went for the varden. But coundn't find them so he decided heck with it and tried to get to the east of the hadrac desert. He got to the middle of it okay but got caught in a sandstorm and got lost. But started out again in the direction he thought was east but was southwest. After ariving in surda he thought something was wrong but stayed there for five years. When the varden marched through surda he changed his mind about joining them and fleed to the empire hoping to join Galbatorix but was caught buy more solders and forced into galbtorix's amry. At the burning plains he ran away in the night to Feinster. When the varden captered him he offered imformation that he got from when he was forced into galbatorix's amy to them in exchange for his freedom.
weapons:A simple knife.
likes:running, strong people who protect him, sugur, peace and quiet.
dislikes:powerful enemies, mushrooms, waking up in the morning.
Animal campanions:none
Charactor's Physical Description:Kveykva is six feet tall has light green and dark green clothes on so as to blend in better. Leather boots and belt. Has a scar on his right arm and is missing the tip of his left index finger. The only armor he has is a light mail jacket and a helmet. His arms are kinda weak because he mostly runs instead of fighting. There's a bald spot on the back of his head where he hit on the rock from when Therinsford was atacked.
Dreams for the future:To find somewhere where he'll be left alone and to improve his fighting skills.
Reason for dreams:So no one will bug him.
Alignment/side:Which ever side will protect him but, generally good.
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Last edited by Kalte Apfelmus on February 18th, 2010, 8:35 pm, edited 7 times in total.
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February 15th, 2010, 6:57 pm |
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dracoaestas
RPG Team Head
Joined: November 17th, 2007, 6:26 pm Posts: 5587 Location: attending a pie-eating contest with the other aspiring evil overlords
Gender: Girl
Affiliation: Skulblakans
Dragon: Ardel
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Re: kveykva
You still need several lines on Personality (you only have 7, and you need 12) and one more line on Physical Description. The other lengths are fine, but could you try to use more complete sentences in your descriptions? For example, your Personality seems more like a list of different items than a paragraph of description.
You don't need better spelling and grammar, just try to look for your typos more so things are easier to read in the future, since you have a fairly high number of small mistakes. You don't have to fix that here, just make sure and watch for it later on.
This is an interesting (and very unique, personality-wise) charry so far. Keep working on it, and hopefully it can be accepted quickly.
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February 18th, 2010, 2:31 am |
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Kalte Apfelmus
Wise DragonRider
Joined: June 21st, 2009, 8:52 pm Posts: 1366 Location: U.S.A. and proud of it.
Gender: Guy
Affiliation: Lamp Shade
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Re: kveykva
okay thanks
i know i'm stuck on personality it's hard
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February 18th, 2010, 2:43 am |
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dracoaestas
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Re: kveykva
Don't worry. If you make your Personality into all complete sentences, that alone should lengthen it quite a bit.
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February 18th, 2010, 2:51 am |
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Kalte Apfelmus
Wise DragonRider
Joined: June 21st, 2009, 8:52 pm Posts: 1366 Location: U.S.A. and proud of it.
Gender: Guy
Affiliation: Lamp Shade
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Re: kveykva
okay thanks i have to do chores right now but when i come in i'll do that
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February 18th, 2010, 2:55 am |
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Kalte Apfelmus
Wise DragonRider
Joined: June 21st, 2009, 8:52 pm Posts: 1366 Location: U.S.A. and proud of it.
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Re: kveykva
sorry to double post but i updated it and i'm hoping it can get accepted and i can start posting.
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February 27th, 2010, 3:51 am |
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dracoaestas
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Re: kveykva
All your lengths look in order now. I Accept. (Just remember to watch for typos in the rps.) Nice work.
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February 27th, 2010, 4:32 am |
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Kalte Apfelmus
Wise DragonRider
Joined: June 21st, 2009, 8:52 pm Posts: 1366 Location: U.S.A. and proud of it.
Gender: Guy
Affiliation: Lamp Shade
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Re: kveykva
thanks
i know i probally should stop posting but it seems rude to not say 'thanks'
thanks again
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February 27th, 2010, 4:35 am |
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dark dragon
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Affiliation: Dragonriders
Dragon: Avadius
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Re: kveykva
Looks good, I accept
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February 28th, 2010, 10:22 pm |
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Aeraldi
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Joined: April 17th, 2007, 11:40 am Posts: 4344 Location: Australia, waiting in the sun with my dragon, Aeraldi, for when we are needed
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Affiliation: Shades
Dragon: Aelir
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Re: kveykva
And to me it looks fine, Accepted.
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March 1st, 2010, 4:47 am |
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