Another nice character idea.
First thing, "She can search ones mind without them barly noticing." That didn't end in the desired point, i'm afraid. "Barely noticing" implies that they notice very little, and "without" negates whatever follows it. So in effect, you're saying that they "don't (notice very little)," so they're actually noticing a lot. How about just ".. one's mind and they'll barely notice?" One more thing, CP uses "elves," not "elfs." The "dragon rider mark" is known more commonly as the "gedwey ignasia." Anyway, fix all of this, and a little more history preferably, and I say accepted.