Hey RPG team, this is my first try. What do you think?

Name: Kael

Age: 100

Gender: male

Race: elf rider

Hair: silver topknot

Eyes: striking blue


Skills: master swordsman, undefeated in every battle or duel he has had. A very strong magician. Little archery skills (about a 4 out of 10).

Home: Nadindel in Du Weldenvarden

Parents: unknown

Siblings: none

Weapons: A sapphire riders sword with a sapphire gem on the wire-wrapped hilt. Two small, unique looking weapons with a one foot long curved blade with hooks on the end, and a one foot long hilt. and six hand-crafted daggers enchanted so they never miss their target.

Character personality: Kael is not afraid to do what it takes to ensure justice and safety for those whom he loves. Although, he still has a sense of humor. Fearless describes Kael since he fears no one, not even Galbatorix.

Character history: Kael grew up in Nadindel until he reached 20 years of age when he moved to Ellesmera to be tested for dragons. 70 years passed with no luck while Kael trained in swordplay and hand-to-hand combat. Then, one day, while showing dragon eggs to some younger elves, a single egg that had been concealed by a blanket laid for the eggs to rest on hatched as soon as Kael touched it. His dragons name was Ohen, named after the legendary “Ohen the strong”. And strong he was indeed! The two trained more furiously than even Eragon and Saphira. They completed their training in just 4 years. And since then the pair has proved themselves in battle time and again and are respected everywhere as noble warriors.

Physical Description: Regular elf tunic (as described in Eldest), with a mithril shirt underneath. Tall and muscular, Kael has a handsome face with enchanting blue eyes, silver hair (worn in a topknot for battle), and pointed ears (surprise! Lol).

Likes: Dueling with a sword, fencing. Flying Ohen. Fighting overconfident younglings that start fights with him. Battles.

Dislikes: Enemy archers. Better duelists (extremely rare). Overconfident young riders or elves.

Dreams for future: None.

Reason for dreams:

Animal companions: Ohen, his sapphire dragon.

Side/alignment: The new order of the riders.


Dragon name: Ohen

Age: 10

Gender: male

Parents: unknown

History: since hatched; Ohen has trained with elder dragons every waking minute until his training was complete. Afterward, he has fought in many battles and has served has a protector of the peace.

Personality: A teaser, or comedian, Ohen has a quick mind and likes to make fun. But will stay on Kaels side no matter what.

Color: sapphire

Appearance: about thirty feet long, from head to tail. Sapphire in color, Muscular body, Black talons and spikes.

Armor: Saddle built for speed, trimmed with black stones that Kael can store energy in.

Dreams for future: to become the strongest dragon in all of alagaesia, even stronger the shruikin.

Reason for dreams: to be a good protector of the peace and to gain status among the other dragons.

has anyone on the rpg team checked this? if so, please reply.