name:elizabeth

age:13

gender:girl

skills:very skilled,accuret,and deadly with sharp,double short swords and bow,
mediocer in destructive magic skilled in healing major and minor wounds with magic.
Can turn dragonish she grows two silver/wite wings on her back, her silver eyes glow and can zoom in or out like dragons, wite claws grow on fingers(very sharp don't touch!)and she can breath under water.

race:elf/human

hair:short black as night with small navy blue highlights.

eyes:beautiful silver

home village:ellsmeara

parents:elein(elf) and aaron(human):location unown

siblings:unown

character history:Born in ellsmeara Elizabeth was abandoned by her parents who disappeared soon after her birth into the once named "empire" and haven`t been seen since.So Elizabeth was adopted by her grandparents and lived with them until the age of ten at which she left to find her parents so she could ask them why they abandoned her. But only three weeks after Elizabeth left she was attacked by former soldiers of the "empire" who had been banished to du weldenvardon after the fall of the "empire" for still supporting Gabatorix after his death. During that fight she was almost killed before she could drive them off. So When she came to the first town (carvahall) she saw she went to the town smith and asked him to forge her a sword. He forged her two short swords and recommended to go to the Fletcher and have him make Elizabeth a bow. So she did and he made her a fine bow made of yew and some arrows(also made of yew)then she was on her way again.Around this time of travel Elizabeth found a deep pool in the spine and while she was going around it she slipped and fell in.Slowly drownding Elizabeth tried to swim to shore but she never learnd to swim and failed,scared Elizabeth thought franticly of her parents she had never met.Suddenly there was a bright light surrounding Elizabeth and a great pain came over her and she could feel her fingernails shapening, wings growing painfully out of her back and a burning on her left cheek running down her neck to the right side of her back but suddenly,the pain stopped, she could breath again and she found she could swim and swam to the shore and marveled at herself but Elizabeth left soon after on foot for her swim had tired her.Elizabeth went to the outpost of erialdie which is in a unexplored part of the Spine to look for her parents.But Elizabeth did not find them there,dismayed she kicked one of the legs of the outpost and,by accident opend a trapdoor.With her hopes up again Elizabeth went into the tunnel went down a long hallway that seemed to streach on forever.Whene she finaly got to the end she found a large smooth black stone that just as Elizabeth touched it it burst into a millon pieces and underneith what used to be a stone was a small,black dragon.Suprised and confused Elizabeth slowly went to the dragon and reached out her hand to touch it but whene she touched it a icy cold chill went up her arm and she couldn`t move for what seemed like forever.But it was only minuets before she warily got up and went back over to the dragon which was on the ground.Elizabeth picked it up again expecting the chill to run up her arm again.But it did not which suprised her.But the dragon suprised her even more when it said,"Hello my name is seth what is yours master?"But the poor confused Elizabeth said,"Y-You can talk?!?""Of corse I can talk!So please tell me your name.""E-Elizabeth""Good i like a rider with a nice name.""Rider???"Yes you are my rider.""I-Im a r-rider?""well im a dragon arent I so lets go im hungery!"So Elizabeth went back to carvahall and got some food for Seth and they have been dragon and rider since.


weapons: two short swords, one yew bow, and small dagger

personality:kind,whene she has her mind set on somthing she never backs down even if it killes her,is always willing to help and loves nature and every thing in it,she has never met a dwarf so she knows nothing of their personality type but she is always willing to help a friend in need even if they had only met yesterday,she hates politics and every thing about them she thinks they are a waste of time and that actions speak louder than words.Elizabeth loves talking with animals mostly cats,dogs,and small animals.is very strong exsept when bones are broken elizabeth hates it when she hears the sound of breaking bones.hates whering dresses she thinks they are uncofertable and stupid.Elizabeth also dreams of becoming a great dragon rider like the fabled eragon and she hopes to someday meet him and his dragon saphira.Elizabeth has a firey scotish temper so dont get her angery trust me i have scars from the last time i got her angery shiver shiver.Elizabeth hates the cold, she cant stand it so she wears lots of warm clothes in the winter.One last point,Elizabeth is not a girly girl!!!
<This part here needs a lot more I'm afraid.>

likes: the forest, her dragon,talking with animals, and friends.

dislikes:caves,evil,death.

characters physical dicription:black/blue hair,silver eyes,long eyelashes, slietly small nose,small mouth,one pointed ear one rounded,both front and back of her torso apple shaped(not overly large)long legs and arms tatto on left side of face that looks like a flame that runs down neck onto upper right back forming into the shape of wings from when she fell into the pooland got her dragon powers,and small scar on lower back from when she fought the evil soljers.has more slender hands than most humans do but they are just the right size for an elf.

dreams for futuer:to find her parents

reasons for dreams: wants to ask her parents why they left her

side: good dragon rider

dragon name:seth

age:3 weeks

gender: male

history:Seth was placed into the tunnel by oremis incase somthing happed to the dragon riders(this was befor the fall of riders).But lay forgoten for many long years untill one day Seth herd a shout of anger and the sound of the trapdoor breaking open.Somehow seth knew this was his rider so whene the young girl touched his egg he decided to hatch and he did.For some resone Seth was incredibly smart and at birth he could speak English and at birth he told her his name and they are now partners together forever.

personality: very smart knew his name by two weeks even though he is only three weeks old he is smarter than Elizabeth and corrects her often. Seth loves to learn new things he even reads books that Elizabeth buys for him.Seth loves to read books and lern new things but he hates war and people obsesed with it.Seth,like Elizabeth will always do somthing for a friend somtimes even if it is (unknowingly)bad.

color: black

apperence:,agile,small scales even for a dragon baby normal sized claws,unusualy white teeth,can turn invisible at will(but it only lasts until seth gets tierd which is pretty quick because seth is still a baby),black eyes,normal nose,mouth,jaws,muscular front and back body,not very muscular limbs,white claws,long tail(darkest part of body)

dreams for futuer:to follow his rider every ware she goes.

there is the completed bio I hope I can get excepted!

what is the point of this?

sorry whene i whrote it it was 15 lines and which personality? rider or dragon and lastly im sorry i can`t spell at all its never been my strong point.

There pppllleeeaaasssee let that be good enufe i worked i long time on that please let me be accepted and thanks for the advice.

there i edited a few more lines on personality and i realy hope that its enufe

Hm...
I will try my best to be as nice as possible as I try to correct you okay?
So err... If I like sorta offend you... It's not intentional...

Ok, so firstly, on skills, you need three lines of elaboration on each skill type.
Your history length is fine But perhaps a little cleaning up is in order?
Erm, you could add in how the characters were feeling in the dialogue too. Be it happy, excited, amazed you know? Stuff like that.

For personality, you can break things down into several categories.
-Likes (why)
-Dislikes (why)
-Things she would do for her friends (why)
-Does she hate anything/anyone? (why)

Yea. Stuff like that. Feel free to add more to the list above

Okay... For her description...
Describe her :-
Entire body
Head
-Face
--hair
--Eyebrows
--Eyelashes
--Eyes
--Nose
--Lips
--Ear
--Beard? (LOL)

Torso
-Front
-Back
Yea. You know how to do this. Describe the shape of her torso, be it hourglass, apple, err...straight... Whatever.

Lowerbody
-Front
-Back
Skip this if you want unless you wish to add in how she wears her weapons here? I personally have very little use for this...

Limbs
-Arms
--Right

--Left

-Legs
--Right

--Left

Any scarring? How do they look like? Muscular? Err... Loose skin? Yea. You decide.




As for her side, I believe 'Good' Is enough




Okay, down to Seth.
History's content is fine.
The problem however comes in at the next section; the Personality.
Basically, just follow the outline for Elizabeth and you'll be fine.


Appearance
Entire body
-Scale and claws/teeth Colour plus any distinctive traits (optional)
Head
-Eye
-Nose
-Mouth
--Jaws
--Teeth

Body
-Upper
-Lower

Limbs
-'Arms'
--Right
---Claws,color, etc.
--Left
---Claws,color, etc.
-'Legs'
--Right
---Claws,color, etc.
--Left
---Claws,color, etc.

Tail
Colour... And anything else.

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Quite a lot eh? But we're still not done lol. You need to fix the typos. I would prefer it if you tried yourself, but if you can't then give one of us mods a pm and we'll see what we can do. (RIGHT??? *glares at other mods*)

Erm... No... Why not you click on one of the links to my characters in my signature? Take a look and mould your appearance and personality after it lol.
Please capitalize all first letters of a sentence and the letter I if it is used alone.

Oh and... There's no such thing as a front torso and bank torso But there is something call the front of hertorso and the back of her torso.

Erm... Ok... No, it's not going to work...

Click on the first link in my signature, it'll show you how much you need to fill in caus I don't think you've read it yet...

Guys, do you think you're being a little hard on her? I like it--very interesting and well-thought out. Reminds me a bit of the Draconians... *thinks for a minute* hmmmm.

The only thing I can really suggest is to provide more elaboration into her personality. Put emotion in the mix and make her seem alive. Otherwise, I enjoy it and is accepted by me.

Well, ILS, 'hard' is relative you know
K, I shall be softer. Sorry ninja Like I said, It wasn't intentional.

Hey, it's my job. i-luv-saphira is a bit hard to type, so just call me ILS. That's what everyone else calls me. Eriel, Aeraldi, come take a look at this guy! Doesn't she remind you of the Draconians?

Accepted! The Draconians are no more an imaginary faction, Aeraldi!

ACCEPTED!