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 Aleah (fixed... again) :) 
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Post Aleah (fixed... again) :)

Name: Aleah. No last name, yet.

Age: 20

Gender: Girl

Skills:
The Gift of Tounge
She can speak and understand any language without studing it. To her, it sounds like english. Later on, she relived that people thought this was freaky, so she pretended to only understand english.

Race: Human/elf hybrid

Hair: Dark brown with a reddish tinge

Eyes: June sky blue

Home Village: Dras Leona

Parents: Unknown.

Siblings: None

Character Personality:
With a mocking smile and bright eyes, Aleah could charm the socks off of anyone. She has a smart mouth and an almost princessy attitude. She can't stand to see people bullied, and will always stand up for anyone else. She feels uncomterable in a crowd, and perfers to be with only one or two close friends. She is extreamly loyal, and when one of her friends are in danger, she will go to any desprate meas to get them back, and will even sacerfice herself for them.

Despite being a bit of a loner, she has a cocky, thrill-seeker attitude. Unfortunately, although she loves Sarkira, she has a hidden terror of hights. She is one of those people who take pride in being good at spots and will never pass up a dare. If you want to get rid of her, ask her to climb Mt. Everest without an oxegen tank. In her bathing suit. She'll do it. When confronted with impossibal odds, she'll do two things: Freak out, and then go and fight like a maniac, or laugh it off and go fight like a maniac. When roused, she fights with a strong intesity that can surprise someone who was fooled by her apperance of carefree easy going-ness. She often comes up with crazy plans that seem impossibal but acctualy work.

Character History:
She grew up in an orphange, never knowing her parents. The orphanage was cruel, and often she would run away, only to be caught again. Once while escaping from the orphanage, she ran into a man who took a fancy to her and adopted her.

She travled with him to many citys. He was extreamly skilled in fighting and survial, and she learned many useful things from him. One day, while travling in the Spine, she returned to their camp to find it deserted. The were strange tracks on the ground that she couldn't read. Beliving him to be dead, she returned to the capital city to contuine her life without him.

She met Asha in jail. She was an extreamly good thief, but once she was caught. She was thrown in to the same cell as an other girl, her soon-to-be-best-friend. She immediately began her plans for escape, and offered to bring the other girl with her. Asha accepted, and ever since then they have stucked together.

Meanwhile, rumors of Dragon Riders spread. The Varden's doings be come lore, while some claim that Galbatorix has another dragon rider in his castle. Aleah dosn't think much of these tales, since she belives that thay don't consern her. One day, while hunting out side the outskirts of the city, she was drawn to a strange purple rock lieing in a near by field. She picked it up and brought it home. This was the beginning of her adventures.

Weapons: A small, curved knife that she keeps by her side. It is extreamly strong, and the handle is in the shape of a dragon's head. She also has a hunting bow.

Likes: drawing, sparring, hunting, animals

Dislikes: Annoying people, bullies, hights.

Animal Companions: none

Character's Physical Description:
The most noticable feature is her eyes. A light, bright blue, they always reveal what she really thinks. Her hair is always kept in a smooth ponytail, but on special occasions she will braid it. Some someone so tall, she is gracefully cordinated, very agile. Her hair is always pulled over her ears to hide the fact that they pointed. Aleah has never met an elf, so she does not know that they have pointed ears, and that she has elf blood. Therefore, she is extremly swift and enduring.

Dreams for the Future: To defete Galbatorix and restore the proper king.

Reason for Dreams: Galbatorix is evil and she doesn't want him hurting anybody else.

Alignment/side: Eventually, the Varden's.

For dragon riders only:

Dragon Name: Sarkira

Age: Hatchling

Gender: Girl

Parents: Unknown

History: Hatched in the middle of the city, Sarkira bonded with her rider right under Galby's nose. Her rider, Aleah, relized the danger that both of them were in and ran away to the forest with her. Sarkira learned flight and fire alone with her rider. She was overjoyed when she learned that there were other dragons, and she desprately wants to meet them. She and Aleah discovered all the information about elves and dwarfs mainly while fleeing from Galbatorix.

Personality: Her bark is worse then her bite. Sarkira will give people quite a scare the first time they meet her, but Sarkira is really not as mean as they might frst think. However, if any of her friends are in trouble, she'll tear apart the whole empire to help them. She is extreamly loyal. she has a rather playful personalitly, and likes to westle and play with other beings. This was easy when she was the size of a cat. Despite being easy going and fun-loving, she can be very ficious and danderous in combat.

Colour: purple

Appearance: Her scales are a soft, shimmery purple. Jet black spikes frame her face and run alone her spine. But the soft underside of her wings are a light blue. Her eyes are yellow like a hawks. She is smaller than most dragons, but longer.

Armour: none

Dreams for future: assisting her rider in the defeat of Galbatorix. After that, who knows?

Reasons for dreams: Galbatorix is an evil dragon abuser

Sorry for any misspellings. Here is a pic of Sarkira:
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Last edited by AleahLaskey on April 4th, 2009, 2:01 am, edited 3 times in total.

March 31st, 2009, 8:48 pm Profile
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Post Re: Aleah
There are a few things you still need to fix up. First, you have quite a few typos, so if you could correct most of them it would be a big help.

Second, you need to expand several of your sections. Aleah's Personality and History need expansion. Sarkira's Personality and History could also be extended a couple lines.

Other than that, it looks good so far. :)

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Post Re: Aleah (fixed)
OK I've edited it and added some additonal info. Asha has an acctual account on here, she's going to join the RP game and she history will align with mine.

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Okey dokey. It looks better, but you still need about 8 more lines on Aleah's personality. Once you fix that, I'll be able to accept. :)

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Post Re: Aleah (fixed again)
OK, I added some more to it. I hope it works this time.

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Post Re: Aleah (fixed again)
You're very close, AleahLaskey, but you still need just 3 more lines on the Personality. (Make sure to count after you post, not before.)

It's looking very nice so far, just a little more should do it. :)

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Post Re: Aleah (fixed... again) :)
I added more to the top paragraph, as well as the bottom one.

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Post Re: Aleah (fixed... again) :)
Excellent work, AleahLaskey. I Accept! :)

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Post Re: Aleah (fixed... again) :)
YAAAAYYYYYYY!!!!!! *Does dance* Thanks I'll go and RP right now :D

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Post Re: Aleah (fixed... again) :)
Whoa, not so fast. You need another approval before I can fully accept your character.

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OK...

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Post Re: Aleah (fixed... again) :)
Could you be more descriptive on her special skill of tounges, it is a great talent, go in depth please?


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Post Re: Aleah (fixed... again) :)
I agree with Star here. Otherwise, well-crafted and accepted!

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